Problem
Review the original and revised paragraphs your classmates and comment on the effectiveness of the revisions. Here are a few things you might consider when writing your responses:
1. Do the revisions improve the clarity of the ideas? If so, how? If not, why not?
2. Is the use of semicolons and colons correct? How might they be used more effectively?
3. Are the transition words used in the revised paragraphs appropriate? If so, why? If not, suggest alternative transition words.
4. What insight about paragraphing and transitions in writing have you gained by reviewing your classmate's post?
5. What insight might you offer your classmate regarding paragraphing and transitions in writing?