Question: You need to create indentations on the references page. Your introduction should name the artist, introduce the work of art, and provide your interpretive stance on it. There is some good thought in this introduction, but stating "numerous artists" is vague and not effective in presenting your interpretive thesis about the specific works of art. If you don't want to name every artist, you could simply name categories. No matter what you need to find a way to frame your overall argument in your introduction. This will allow you to give an overview of evidence. Because the thesis is not in the first paragraph, the following paragraphs analyzing various artists do not relate examples and analysis back to the thesis, and this results in an overall weaker argumentation.
The analysis here is skilled, but what needs to primarily improve is your inclusion of a statement at the beginning of each paragraph of how the example relates to the thesis, and then a rationale at the end of each paragraph as to how the preceding analysis relates back to the thesis as well as the following paragraph. Finally, you need to add page numbers.
I would like to see you use MLA for the commentary because this APA formatting with the research focus worked well here but I want to see how a more fluid organization challenges you to relate your points back to the thesis without section divisions.
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