Why does Chinese parenting make their children better in acdemic performance?
The reference resources: https://sites.google.com/site/febmainpathways/home,click Reseach project,and then click parenting, in HIGH LEVEL READINGS and
INTRODUCTORY LEVEL READINGS, there are 5 reference readings. Attachment is a group essay, and my part is paragraph 3,
started with:"Chinese parents in education on the severity of a considerable difference with the West. Firstly,Chinese parents think prioritize schoolwork above all else and only "....
the teacher said my part is not clear and need to rewrite
1. need to have clear topic sentence
2. the paragraph would illustrate 3 points with example and references from the 6 sources
3. in total it should be 300 words around.
4. DO NOT change other paragraphs, only paragraph 3.
Attachment:- Essay.rar