Problem
Do peer review for the article below (Answer these questions once you read a headline and summary for LinkedIn profile):
A. How effectively does your peer summarize his/her previous experience? Identify one detail that helps "show" readers experience rather than tell them. Also, identify examples where your peer could be more effective in showing his/her experiences.
B. How effectively does the summary identify career goals or accomplishments? Are there areas where these goals/accomplishment could be better defined?
C. Does your peer use a professional but personal writing styles? Are there any words or phrases that should be revised to help make the summary more impactful?
D. What keywords does the summary include that you think are relevant to your peer's industry? Can you think of different or more specific keywords?
E. What action words/verbs does your peer use to summarize his/her qualifications?
F. What action words/verbs do you suggest changing to strengthen the summary?
Article: LinkedIn Headline: Aspiring Anesthesiologist | Experience in Medicine and Customer Service | Sophomore at University of North Texas
Summary:
I am currently a sophomore at University of North Texas in Denton. I am majoring in Biology, in hopes of earning my doctorate. With this, I aspire to become an anesthesiologist and pursue a lifelong dream.
In my time of being a student, I have adapted more to the outside world and experienced things that have driven me to become more passionate about being in the medical field and learn more about medicine. I have taken classes and put my knowledge to the test over the last couple years. I desire to work under a pharmacist or doctor to gain more insight on the future job I aspire to have.
I believe my skills have made me capable enough to obtain a lower class job in the medical field to help me with my future goals.