Rewrite it in order to make the message more effective and persuasive. (15 marks)
• Apply the suggestions you made in the previous question.
• Ensure that you include relevant components of a persuasive message,
• Write a persuasive favour request following an indirect pattern.
August 23, 2009
Mr. Alan Schneider
Southern Greenhouses
21 Fairford Street North
Moose Jaw, SK S6X 2C4
Dear Mr. Schneider:
As a successful Saskatchewan businessman, you know it is important to support worthy causes within our province. The Saskatoon Horticultural Club (SHC) is just such a cause and we know a man of your reputation will want to help us out.
We have heard of your reputation for growing exceptionally large pumpkins and want you to come speak to us at our regularly scheduled meeting in October. This will be a great opportunity for all of us to swap stories and learn from each other.
We normally invite speakers who live closer to Saskatoon, but the drive is not too bad, so we thought you might be willing to make the trip.
We could pay for gas if you like.