Managerial Communications
Writing Techniques - Parallel Structure II
Learning Objective: Examine strategies for developing effective communication
Writing Parallels
Rewrite each of the following and use parallelism to accentuate the parallel ideas.
Example: We broke some windows, hopped a few trains. We had a few fights.
Revised: We broke some windows, hopped a few trains, and got into several fights.
1. Tom enjoys swimming, and he likes to skate too.
2. He wore a green suede jacket, and his shirt was flowered. He was wearing platform shoes, multicolored.
3. At 16, I was full of wildness, outspoken, and I was an uncaring person.
4. The work was difficult and there was danger in it.
5. Like many women, she had several roles: wife, mother, going to school, job.
6. When the teacher left the room, I talked loudly, was fighting with my classmates and would throw paper airplanes and even climbed on the desks.
7. When I disobeyed, my parents punished me: no going out, I couldn't talk on the telephone, and was not allowed to have company.
8. Slowly, with ease, and soundless, the dancers moved offstage.
9. The drums pounded, did throb, were rising and falling.
10. Good writing must be honest, have freshness, and precise words.
11. My son wants to be either a fireman or fly planes.
12. The students were more interested in dates with girls than in studying math.