Please review the business letter below and find at least four ways that it can be improved, providing specific examples and reasons for them. Remember to comment on at least one other person's thread.
September 10, 201x
Ms. Sandra Scott
2350 Riverside Drive
Joplin, MO 64801
Dear Ms. Scott:
This is to inform you that we regret that Capitol Financial Services will be unable to support your good work with the Lincoln County chapter of the National Cerebral Palsy Institute.
As a matter of fact, your letter describing local efforts at preventing and treating this serious affliction was quite touching. We wish we could contribute again this year, as I believe we have done in previous years. But giving money to charities that are unrelated to our business is out of the question this year.
We hope you will understand that we simply cannot exercise the luxury of making contributions
to all charities at this point in time.
Sincerely,
CAPITOL FINANCIAL SERVICES