The Assignment is to revise this In the attached, there are comments within the pdf that are to be used for revision. I was also told:
"The purpose of this assignment," according to the syllabus, "is to begin drafting your academic argumentative research paper." It includes both an introduction and a literature review. I think you are doing a fairly good job but your argument and your style need development. Your introduction is particularly weak. You use APA editorial style incorrectly, however, in that you use information without citing it correctly. This text, too, could be better edited and proofread. You need to summarize each side of the debate and build a persuasive, logical argument.
What is the problem? What is your position? First, you need to explain how much money the NCAA sports system generates. How much of this money goes to athletes? What is the debate engendered by this system? Is this fair? What is your position? You need to define the issues or problems that you are addressing in much greater detail.