Essay Assignment in which you will be a revision of Essay #3 and citing 2-3 sources; give yourself enough time to complete the Writing Process.
Because this a Departmental required essay, you must have certain criteria. These are identified at the end of this assignment.
Topic: You will be using Essay #3- Causal Analysis as your starting point. If you did not complete this essay, you can still do Essay #4, but you will not have the added benefit of your essay having been commented on and graded. Just go back and review what the directions were for Essay #3.
Prewrite: You might need to do some prewriting or outlining based on the comments that were provided on the initial essay. If you had poor examples or focus on the causes or effects, prewriting or outlining some ideas will help you gather your thoughts together so that you can add to those paragraphs. If you want to finesse some details or you don't like a particular section of your essay, you have the ability to change it! You are not locked into using everything exactly as it was in the first submission. This is merely a starting point.
Draft: If you completed Essay #3, you have one draft of this essay already, but you might need to draft new body paragraphs or having reviewed your conclusion, you might decide you could write a better conclusion paragraph. Draft whatever part of the essay you might need to. Remember, your draft should be 4-5 paragraphs and approximately 600-800 words. You must have an explicit thesis statement. Your body paragraphs must have clear topic sentences. I expect your paragraphs to be well-developed (11-15 sentences per body paragraph). Add coherence with transition words (you may have multiple drafts, and that is okay). Your argument needs to be supported by appropriate evidence gathered from your own experience and from common knowledge. Provide a title. Consider your counterargument.
MLA Portion: In addition to the standard development within your essay, you must have at least one direct quote and one paraphrase from at least two articles (you may have more quotes and/or more paraphrases, but there must be at least one quote and one paraphrase, and you must use two different articles). Remember, you have two articles from the summary assignment. Use these to your advantage to improve and enrich what you have already written.
The quote(s) and paraphrase(s) should have introductory phrases and must be cited correctly within the essay as well as on the Works Cited page. The Works Cited should have at least two citations since you must use two different articles and should be presented in alphabetical order, not the order they appear in your essay. Remember the Works Cited page is a separate page at the end of the essay (you do this by hitting enter at the end of your essay, clicking insert Page Break, centering the words Works Cited, hitting enter, clicking left align, and beginning your citations).
Revise: The entire essay is a revision of the previous, but as you begin to alter, add, and take away certain parts of the previous essay, you want to make sure your essay still works. Keep your audience in mind. What does the reader need to know? Control your ethos. Think about your transitions and introductory phrases for your quote and paraphrase. Review ALL the previous work you have submitted and recognize the errors you have been making this semester. Analyze your essay by consulting the Rubric.
Proofread: Use an appropriate level of formality and a reasonable tone. Read the essay out loud. Think about word choices, vague phrases, and spelling problems. Check your grammar carefully. Visit the Writing Center. Review all of the departmental requirements noted at the end of this assignment page and double check that you have in fact done these.
Typed Final: Make sure your Essay #4 has the proper heading according to MLA standards, that you used Times New Roman and 12 point font, that your margins are 1 inch, and that you have double spaced, paginated, indented, and aligned correctly. Use the directions on Canvas. You will have a works cited page - it is an entirely separate page within the document, so do not tack it on to the bottom of your typed draft (when you are done typing your draft, click Insert then "Page Break" or "New Page"). Save your paper as an RTF, and name the file with your last name, your first name, and the assignment name. For example, YourNameEssayFour.
Departmental Requirements:
· The essay must be 600-800 words in length (the words in your Works Cited page and heading do not count).
· The paper must have an explicit thesis statement and precise topic sentences.
· Support points using evidence from the articles.
· The paper must be typed and submitted to Canvas as well as VeriCite.
· You may also use personal experience and your own knowledge to support your points.
· Use an appropriate level of formality, and use a reasonable tone.
· This paper should be a synthesis of information from the sources and your own inferences, comments, and conclusions. You should not be overly reliant on any one source, nor should your paper be a patchwork of information from the sources.
Sources must be documented using MLA-style parenthetical references and works cited page. The works cited page should include only those sources actually cited
Causes of obesity in America 1
Indeed obesity is an epidemic in America because if you look into most population’s majority of the people look obese. The world views the United States to have a higher standard of living but funnily, it is blessed that even the poor are obese. The high rate of obesity in America shows that the quality of life is getting worse for the population. Our culture bombards people with weight loss programs and fad diets and on the other hand, they engage in activities that promote obesity making it ironical. This is not to say that people should take a fatalistic attitude because it is impossible to stay slender in the U.S or those battling weight losses should give up .I think that obesity is generally stimulated by one’s environment and the modern American lifestyle is another major contributing factor to people gaining weight.
Compared to other countries, Americans are said to be have an average income do lead a sedentary lifestyle. This is because they can access conveniences such as, cell phones, cars, remote controls and food drive-troughs hence the average adult will only engage in some fitness exercises if they plan for it within the day. It is a reality that as we feel like life is becoming more stressful and the economy is declining, we tend to push exercising time to backburner so that we can get longer working hours and concurrently the time to rest. Achieving a balanced diet may prove more difficult than we expect as much as we might be aware of what it look like.
From what I learnt in my biology class, the highly processed convenience foods do contain saturated fats, sodium, and high-fructose corn syrup. Most families nowadays are very busy so they choose tom take fast foods such as grilled chicken and salads and they are definitely contains high amounts of fat and sodium. Deciding to cook fresh and organic food to most people is time-consuming, requires planning, it is expensive and it is a skill that most adults grew up not knowing how to do it. Another thing is that American restaurants and fast-food outlets are big that people cannot even tell what healthy food does look like. You enter into a restaurant and serving of pasta that is meant to be one- half cup, the restaurant serves at least three times bigger.
Another observable factor that causes obesity is genetics. If you keenly observe some families, you find that most of them are obese all the way to the extended family. Scientifically, genetics play a role in how your body stores fat and where it accumulates it. Behavioral factors such as eating habits and activity levels contribute to weight gain and that is why family lifestyles and eating patterns do significantly influence obesity. Surprisingly most immediate or extended families have traditions of celebrating with food whenever they have an event to celebrate about. They end up consuming traditional foods that have high simple carbohydrates, fat and high calories.
I tend to think that age is another determining factor of obesity. Most of the older Americans look obese and it may be because they become less active and they lose muscle mass as they grow older. It is difficult to maintain a healthy weight when the body starts to process slowly hence less efficient as much as it can be done through exercise and proper diet. Children are not left out in this epidemic because some of them are obese due to inactivity and the poor choices of food parents make for them. This really endangers their health. The unsafe environments and poverty levels in some regions in America can also be the cause of obesity. These places do lack fresh food due to lack of access to shops that provide the quality food. They also lack access to clean and spaces for recreation activities that can improve their health.