Message for analysis: Analyzing communication effectiveness
Read the following blog posting and then 1. analyze whether the message is effective or ineffective (be sure to explain why) and 2. revise the message so that it follows this chapter's (chapter 1, Business Communication Today 12th) guidelines. The following is the blog:
It has come to my attention that many of you are lying on your time cards. If you come in late, you should not put 8:00 on your card. If you take a long lunch, you should not put 1:00 on your time card. I will not stand for this type of cheating. I simply have no choice but to institute an employee monitoring system. Beginning next Monday, video cameras will be installed at all entrances to the building, and your entry and exit times will be logged each time you use electronic key cards to enter or leave.
Anyone who is later for work or late coming back form lunch more than three times will have to answer to me. I don't care if you had to take a nap or if you girls had to shop. This is a place of business, and we do not want to be taken advantage of by slackers who are cheaters to boot.
It is too bad that a few bad apples always have to spoil things for everyone.