This is a letter for University. About ''I want to keep continue my study in university. This letter should be more strong grammatically and good English.
Around 1000 word count.
Letter information.1 paragraph
- Before I am coming to Australia it was my dream to study deakin
- Beautiful environment
- Good education stuff at deakin
- And helpful teachers
2 paragraph (what happened in previous 12 month)
- Unfortunately my sister got sick. (Japanese Encephalitis)
- I was in homesick
- Allways thinking about my elder sister.
- My father spend all the money on my sister.
- The had a really bad financial situation.
(above 5 section please explain as a very emotional you can add more if you need)
3 paragraph(what happened in my life past 12 month)
- I used to work really hard here because my father said he spending all the money on my sister.
- I am stat to work as a cleaner
- Some time morning, and 6.pm 4.30 am morning, I was not in physically well because of this work
- I have send money to my father sometimes.
- Sometime I missed the classes
- From that reason I fail 2 trimester but I used to study really hard, '' you can see if you check my assignment.
- I was homeless 1 month. ''march''
- Because I didn't have a money to pay my rent. I paid timester 1 outstanding fees as well
4 paragraph
- my sister getting well now
- My father said he will handle financial from this trimester
- Father said just work for your daily expenses
- Unfortunately I have got letter from deakin I can't study in deakin college.
- But I am really need to finish my diploma
5 paragraph (my plane)
- I was thinking to study bachelor of health science after my diploma. ( diploma of health science)
- But I change my mind, I am going to study bachelor of sport science after diploma.
- And I'm thinking to study post graduate after degree at deakin.
- Deakin is my turning point in my life.
- ( got late to send to deakin this letter because I was waiting for doctors letter for prove my sisters medical condition.)
Above all information deeply explain.
1). ''And write a small letter a different word document'' writing as my dad. Like let my son to study at deakin. He is our dream'' like this way. Emotional way.