Choose two of the following thesis statements, tell what is wrong with each one, and revise each one to make it more effective:
Commuting to college presents problems
Commuting is a +???ine for many students who do not live in the university campus. This routine can make a student isolated, lonely and cut off from rest of the college universe. The mental state of these commuters becomes isolated and dejected as they are unable to live a proper student's life on the campus. Since they are not residents of the college they do not feel attached to their college atmosphere. The solution to this problem lies in making connections. Commuter students need to make extra efforts to get involved with all the college activities. They can join college clubs or hangout in the college areas and lounges with their colleagues. They need to be friendlier with both the resident as well their commuter friends. Also they can have commuting group from their own class which travels together from college to home. This way the feeling of loneliness will surpass.
Budgeting your time is important
An important quality of a successful student is to manage time effectively. But most of the students are unable to do so because of lot of distractions like watching television, games, clubbing, roaming around, unnecessary playful activities, etc. These are some basic hurdles that each student is facing due to which he is unable to cope up with his studies. The solution to the problem lies in managing time effectively. Plan your day or week's activities well in advance. Organize your activities in such a way that you have enough time for studying as well as entertainment. Create specific targets and take concrete steps to achieve them. Pen your goals and take a small step every day to achieve them. The most important step is to be truthful and realistic to your own heart and mind.